今回も、課題提出後12時間あまりでGarry先生より添削戻りました。

※私が今受講しているのは　「中級インテンシブ・プログラム」の全12回です。

反省は、＠が多い事！「冠詞の使い方が間違っています。」と、

sp「スペルミス」が6か所も！これは酷い！

From:  xxx Ideguchi
Date:  xxxxxxxxxx
To:  info@fujox.com
Subject:  Page-2-Print software purchasing order

Dear Mr. Suzumoto,

Hello, my name is K Ideguchi, an Illustrator for Whitegoods Incorporated based in Tokyo.We are planning to purchase 10 “Page-2-Print” software license at the pronoun（代名詞が違う） earliest convenience. Before we purchase, I’d like to ask you if our requests are acceptable. Could you take them into consideration, please?

First of all, we are wondering if you could provide unlimited telephone support upon purchasing. We would like our designers to get used to handling/using（こちらがおすすめ） this new software as soon as possible as any transition time could disrupt our production schedule. Your telephone suport sp（スペルミス） will help us have @（冠詞が違う） smooth transition.
In additon sp（スペルミス）, is it possible to provide a @（冠詞が違う）in-house traning sp（スペルミス） session for our designers upon purchasing? Having a face-to-face training will allow them to ask direct
questions upon conjunction using @（冠詞が違う） actual software.
Furthermore, if you plan to upgrade this software within @ （冠詞が違う）few months, could you offer us a free upgrade when the new version is availalbe sp（スペルミス）? We need to purchase the software as soon as possible as our company is planning to upgrade the our entire computers network to Windows 7 in two months.
The purchasing timing is also very important for us.
Lastly, we are wondering if you could offer pronoun（代名詞が違う） 20% discount on our 10 license purchasings this time. We have 7 designers but will buy
3 extra licenses for future needs. It would be very appriciated sp if you can offer the discount on the estimated price of $12,000.

We truely sp（スペルミス） appriciate sp（スペルミス） your kind considerations prep（前置詞が違う） @（冠詞が違う） above and look forward to hearing @（冠詞が違う） positive reply from you hopefully by the end of this week.

Sincerely yours,

前回まで「前置詞」で苦しめられていたが、今回は、明らかに冠詞。

それなりに書き上げたハズなのに！毎回同じ気持ちになっています。2回目の提出こそパーフェクト✨　を目指す・・・